Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/UnNews:Barack Obama's wife is getting a cleaning job for the Clinton family
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UnNews:Barack Obama's wife is getting a cleaning job for the Clinton family[edit source]
Sorry that there's no pictures, you can see my UN:PIC request and help out if you can. Suggestions would be great--Sir Manforman 
13:32, 31 August 2007 (UTC)
| Humour: | 1 | I didn't find that much funny, it definitely needs to be more thought-out, as it seems you did this in one hour(Don't mean to be harsh). |
| Concept: | 4 | I found the concept of this pretty boring. Spruce it up to make it more interesting! |
| Prose and formatting: | 3 | It needs to be more longer, it just basically just says that Barack's wife is cleaning for the Clinton's. Of course, that's what the article's about, but it's not supposed to be all that it's about. Go into more detail, do something like leading the concept of Barack's wife cleaning the Clinton's house into an unusual direction. |
| Images: | 0 | Of course you don't have images, but I understand you're waiting for them. Just make sure they're good enough. Good images will help your article not only in humo(u)r, but can be used to attract the eye more, since, as I said before, it's pretty boring. |
| Miscellaneous: | 5 | For some reason I feel the link to White House should be linked to UnNews:The White House discovered to be off-white!. |
| Final Score: | 13 | Just expand and think more about the article. |
| Reviewer: | --Narf, the Wonder Puppy/I support Global Warming and I'm 100% proud of it! 17:03, 8 October 2007 (UTC) | |