UnNews talk:Millions 'accidentally' put on Mafia Hitlist by incompetent UK government officials

Absolutely love the concept here but think you could perhaps make the article even better. You could start by moving swiftly on from the number of deaths to talk about the financial implications for the government, as if the death toll was relatively unimportant. You could then develop this in a number of ways. For example you could quote the PMs intentions of how to recoup the money by, say, turning the heating down a notch at westminster and switching to low energy light bulbs, thereby saving the world from global warming into the bargain. Alternatively you could say that the government claim to be unworried by the "so-called crisis" as they expect to more than make back their hitman fees on death duties.

Even if you ignore all the above you should at least take out the exlaimation mark since it doesn't fit with the understated tone of the article.

I think if you do a bit more work this article could be good enough to be featured on the main page as it has the fantastic concept that holds good unnews articles together. If you can't be bothered to work on the article yourself but don't mind someone else editing it heavily I'd be more than happy to take it on.

Cheers, --Kelpan 00:39, 24 November 2007 (UTC)