Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/user:DarkBlue/Sega Dreamcast
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User:DarkBlue/Sega Dreamcast[edit source]
This is my rewrite for the currently terrible Dreamcast article, which is requesting a steamroller. Be honest (but not a dick!) I've tried to follow HTBFANJS to the letter and Im pretty pleased with the results NOTE- I'd like if this article was reviewed by a Dreamcast owner, than they might get a few more of the jokes! DarkBlue 19:18, 8 October 2007 (UTC)
| Humour: | 7 | I liked some of the bits in there. You had some strange connections, but I sometimes make some bizarre/obscure ones myself, and hope the reader 'gets it'. |
| Concept: | 8 | I used to own a Dreamcast, long ago...and interesting mix with star-wars |
| Prose and formatting: | 8 | formatting: seems to be pretty much normal/regular (whatever that means). prose: I think in the 'Decline' section, where you talk about it being a piece of shit...maybe you could make that a quote from someone (find name of good exec at sega, maybe) |
| Images: | 9 | Fits right in with the type of article. 1 per section. All good there. |
| Miscellaneous: | 10 | not applicable (read: wtf?) |
| Final Score: | 42 | I did a couple minor edits for spelling. Think i found most. Also, usually you dont have a comma before the word 'and'..but i left those in there..I think its ready for posting. I'm still new here, so you might want a 2nd opinion (if you so desire) |
| Reviewer: | --Finnius  20:16, 20 October 2007 (UTC)
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