Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/White Castle
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White Castle[edit source]
~ The* ~ 04:55, July 11, 2010 (UTC)
Humour: | 4.44 | All right, so I'll give you the notes I took section by section.
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Concept: | 5.41 | I feel guilty giving a score for this because, frankly, I'm not sure what the concept is. Is it a racist restaurant, or a dirty restaurant, or both? Part of the problem is also how little developed this article is. You haven't allowed the potential in whatever idea you have to completely flourish, go mad, and destroy all life on th—did I say that aloud? |
Prose and formatting: | 6.66 | Nothing special, basic decent formatting and pretty good orthography. Rather than =History=, though, you should use ==History==—smaller and prettier. Also, all caps gives people eye strain. Better to use bold or italic for emphasis. Oh, and add categories at the bottom of your article code! Like: [[Category:WHATEVER CATEGORY YOU LIKE]].
See? Strains your eyes like crazy. |
Images: | 4.48 | Needs more of them, and needs funnier captions. Like that last image, for instance, which has at least a mildly humorous caption. That early logo is I guess funny, but it would be even funnier if you milked that joke some more in the next image's caption or the article text or somewhere. |
Miscellaneous: | 4.26 | Overall it's just too undeveloped for me to give a good miscellaneous score. I don't even know if this has potential: all I know about White Castle is that Sulu from the Star Trek reboot and Kutner from House MD wanted to go there once. I say, keep working on it. Flesh out the sections a bit more. In fact, flesh out the table of contents a bit more. I'm not kidding. Have an outline of what sections you'll be writing, and it give you a sense of direction and concept. |
Final Score: | 25.25 | Recap: racism or hygiene (or both), more sections, more content, categories, sectioning (don't worry, I'm the one that's getting sectioned, not you), Sulu and Kutner. Hope this helps. |
Reviewer: | Sir MacMania GUN—[19:29 19 Jul 2010] |