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UnNews:Ving Rhames' dog kills zombie[edit source]
This is a great idea with (apparently) sub-par execution. (I thought it was funny, though.) What more do I need to do to make this article funny without forgoing all of the Ving Rhames, zombie, Ken Foree, Dawn of the Dead jokes, which are essential to the article anyway?
Thanks for your help. 
PF4Eva, the President of Imagination Vote for me My tax returns 23:09, 5 August 2007 (UTC)
| Humour: | 5 | I might give this a so-and-so...the reason behind is because you kinda used too much things that is irrelevant to the news article that you showed us. You kind of randomly mentioned things that doesn't relate to Ving Rhames or anything relating to the dog attack incident. From my previous review when I submitted my Piplup, I got a poor score because I mentioned too many things that is not relating to Piplup (in addition, no one gives a shit on Pokemon since the show is for wusses, so that contributes as well). |
| Concept: | 4 | I doubt that anyone will find the article original. Ving Rhames might not spend his life on being in zombie movies. The reason why he is well known is because of the remake of Dawn of the Dead. But I do find the concept of the dog becoming zombie to be ok (rumors has it that Rhames may appear on another zombie movie remake), but not really original. |
| Prose and formatting: | 3 | Article is quite too short, then again, you need to remove some randomness, especially the last comment. |
| Images: | 7 | Images are okay, I find the picture of the world's ugliest dog and the cute Labrador Retriever to be a bit silly (Keep in note that according the actual news article, the dogs were mastiff). |
| Miscellaneous: | 10 | No additional comments |
| Final Score: | 29 | All I can say is this, try focusing on the dog attack incident more rather than Dawn of the Dead. You might to Google in to find more articles relating to the dog attack incident. Also, if you feel that the article may still be too short, try to keep into the gist and finding more sources can help out. OEJ mostly tell me that restating the truth in a whimsical way is funnier than sheer randomness (and trust me, I got bad results on sheer randomness). Also, if you find more movies that Ving Rhames is in that is NOT zombie movie, you can silly things up a bit on the dog attack incident relating to that movie, everyone did enough Ving Rhames Dawn of the Dead jokes, and I'm going to start of a sheen new joke relating to straitjackets. |
| Reviewer: | --Dark Paladin X 12:26, 19 August 2007 (UTC) | |