Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/The Tempest (re-review)
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The Tempest[edit source]
Okay, this is the second submission of The Tempest to Pee Review. The first time it was reviewed (see here), it got an okay review, but it needed more pics and a better layout. Weel, I've redone the layout a bit better, and put in some picture. So here's hoping it's gonna be good. So don't completely rip it to pieces.
Garionepsilon 11:04, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
The Tempest is being reviewed by Your Source for Fine Scented Pee And Whatever Else Comes Out Of Him |
Yep, it's me. • <Apr 17, 2008 [5:19]>
Humour: | 7.4 | avg of each section. NOTE: I have not read the play, and I don't know what it's about.
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Concept: | 9 | Good for you for tackling this. I would imagine that it was a struggle to write. Parodies are always hard, and you did a good job (except for some of the images, but that's later). |
Prose and formatting: | 6 | I noticed some grammar errors (and the formatting error in section 2.3). Get someone to look it over for you. |
Images: | 5 | First image made no sense to me. Second image is unnecessary and actually detracts from the essay. The mario picture is okay, I suppose. The shipbuilding image is actually funny. Therefore, I think I should ask that you only put in pictures that are necessary, not just random pics to satisfy the picture requirement! |
Miscellaneous: | 6.9 | avg'd: {{Pee|7.4|9|6|5}}
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Final Score: | 34.3 | I think that this article has potential and could be featured in the future. Try to find some appropriate pictures, get rid of the internet memes, and clean up the grammar and you should be good to go. I hope I helped, GE! |
Reviewer: | • <Apr 17, 2008 [6:20]> |