Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/The Hell Outta Here
The Hell Outta Here[edit source]
After another round of edits and revising, it's back. Yes, the article about the famous Zork 3 weapon. Previous reviews are on the talk page, if anyone cares. --Andorin Kato 01:42, 14 November 2007 (UTC)
The Hell Outta Here is being reviewed by Your Source for Fine Scented Pee And Whatever Else Comes Out Of Him |
Skimmed Lego's previous reviews. Let's check it out... -- • <-> 03:25, Nov 14
Humour: | 7.2 | avg of all sections
I like the intro. I'm mystified.
It goes too far in the middle part (maintenence), and somehow, not far enough in the description of the weapon.
I found myself wishing this section was longer and more crazy. Go ahead and work on that, if you want.
I like it, but could you conceivably go even more overboard? That would be really good. These sections are really short!
I feel like I'm missing some kinda in-joke here, and it's not just the template at the top telling me that. This is a list, and it's nearly giggle-worthy, but it's just too random/in-jokey.
Oh. It's from Zork. I... don't care about Zork. Don't mention Zork. Stop talking about Zork. |
Concept: | 7 | I, like LJLego, really like the idea of having "the hell outta here" be a weapon, however, and this is why you didn't get a 10, this is an in-joke. That's bad. Please lose all in-joke references to Zork. I've never played it, but you should definitely try to appeal to a wider audience with this. This has tremendous potential. |
Prose and formatting: | 8 | Above average. I wish the sections were expanded, however. |
Images: | 9 | I can't think of anything to criticize on the images except that I've seen them all before. |
Miscellaneous: | 7.8 | avg of all scores. |
Final Score: | 39 | This is fun to read, but it's too short and "in-jokey" for me. I think I covered what needs to be done in the above. If you have any questions or if my review didn't do it for you come see me. |
Reviewer: | • <-> 03:25, Nov 14 |