Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Lestat de Lioncourt
Jump to navigation
Jump to search
Lestat de Lioncourt[edit source]
FairyGarland 04:03, 25 April 2008 (UTC)
Humour: | 4 | Mostly, the humor here seems a lot to be focused on the sex jokes and how he is Tom Cruise. This is considered to be say, mostly unoriginal. Because we know Tom Cruise is a scientists and we know he played a vampire. What I think you should to is read up on the wikipedia article about him. Analyze the article, and think to yourself, what can you parody, what can you make funny. Also remove the list, lists should only be used as informational devices, not as tools of humor. |
Concept: | 6 | This is a good concept about a character that has appeared in liteary works, the only flaw is that he's a vampire. A joke that is hard to make workable. Again, you should ditch the concept of this character being Tom Cruise, cause it just doesn't work on an article like this. Instead make the article about the vampire, not about who played it. As the vampire might have something that you could parody. |
Prose and formatting: | 4 | Well, let the sentence speak for itself. "Despite any claims made by Anne Rice, Lestat is actually a real person |
Images: | 4 | I kinda like the the one with the sexual prose but can you please remove the movie poster. It has no business in an article like this. Also try looking for images of the two of them together, Lestat killing or whatever you can think of. If you can't find the images. Go on Image Request and request up that image. |
Miscellaneous: | 4.5 | Averaged via Pee Review Guidelines. |
Final Score: | 22.5 | I understand what you're trying to do. Take a vamipre and associate it with Tom Cruise, but it just doesn't work here. Just because Tom Cruise played him doesn't mean that he should be connected to him, no. Real actors like Tom Cruise and Will Smith should be parodied, not fictional characters that an actor plays. I however applaud the effort, but an article like this does have potential. Like I said, read up and think about what you can parody in this character, look deep, seriously find something you can parody. Also note HTBFANJS and the featured articles. Which can be used as refrences. Have any comments, leave them at my talk page. I wish your article the best of luck in the future. |
Reviewer: | The Improver talk • contribs • 03:39, Apr 26 2008 (UTC) |