Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Corn Flakes (Review Two)
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Corn Flakes [edit source]
Received some very positive comments from the first review. Has since been improved. What do you think? Nameable • mumble? • (UnScr:PWotM) 17:28, 27 July 2009 (UTC)
- Great job, it's so much better! Staircase CUNt 17:41, 27 July 2009 (UTC)
- Thanks! Nameable • mumble? • (UnScr:PWotM) 17:48, 27 July 2009 (UTC)
- I take it that means you aren't doing this one Stairs? --ChiefjusticeDS 19:50, 29 July 2009 (UTC)
- I'm not. Staircase CUNt 04:19, 2 August 2009 (UTC)
- Is anybody? Nameable • mumble? • (UnScr:PWotM) 09:27, 2 August 2009 (UTC)
- I'll give you a review for this one. Sequence 13:27, 2 August 2009 (UTC)
- Is anybody? Nameable • mumble? • (UnScr:PWotM) 09:27, 2 August 2009 (UTC)
- I'm not. Staircase CUNt 04:19, 2 August 2009 (UTC)
- I take it that means you aren't doing this one Stairs? --ChiefjusticeDS 19:50, 29 July 2009 (UTC)
- Thanks! Nameable • mumble? • (UnScr:PWotM) 17:48, 27 July 2009 (UTC)
Humour: | 8 | I'll go through this part in sections to make it easier to analyse.
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Concept: | 9 | A world famous cereal is a good thing to make fun of as it allows you to poke fun at the sneaky tricks that the industry plays. And the fact that Corn Flakes really are gross. You've explored the concept well. |
Prose and formatting: | 10 | I couldn't see any spelling mistakes, and the sections were well laid out with not too long and not too short sections. The only thing that is a little odd is the tone in the introduction sits at odd with the rest of the article. In the introduction it is self-referential, but in the rest of the entry it doesn't make any references to itself. This isn't a problem as it works pretty well, but I wonder if you could see if you can rewrite the intro to maintain the same tone as the rest of the piece. If that isn't possible then don't worry about it as it also works fine as it is. I'm going to go ahead and give you full marks for this sections. |
Images: | 10 | You've got three images which is just the right amount for an article of this size. They all have humorous photoshopped jokes are related to the topic. Again full marks. |
Miscellaneous: | 9 | I use this section as a 'would I email this to my friend' part. At the moment I probably would email this to my friends particularly if I were eating breakfast. |
Final Score: | 46 | A really funny article. I'm afraid I can't give many suggestions because I like exactly what you have done with it so far. If you want to make any other comments about the review then feel free to do so on my talk page. |
Reviewer: | Sequence 15:00, 2 August 2009 (UTC) |